Post by BiRDZiLLA! on Mar 1, 2010 17:47:55 GMT -5
Alright, I'll cut to the chase;
For the last few months I've wrangled with my own story idea, as actually a back story to one of my newer Original Characters, Corneilious. I guess I've finally got it down to one broad outline, but I can't tell if it's original anymore or not.
Can you guys help me out? It's okay to totally rip on it, I love the idea to peices for some reason, and you won't make me hate it in the least.
When Neili is 12, his 16 year old sister goes missing, and it's reported as a kidnapping. At this time, he suddenly finds himself 'stalked' before realizing his stalking isn't something human. Eventually he concludes it must be a ghost, and believes it's his sisters ghost haunting him as it only ever shows up when bad things are bound to happen. When he's 14 he meets Zenick and Crow (Lynn), who are 10 & 18 respectively as part of a church group thing in order to keep tabs as Lynn is Zenick's rather 'loopy' guardian of a Sister (his parents were rather sick of Crow so they got her her own apartment and sent Zenick to live with her to keep tabs). Zenick's blind, so he finds more and more time with him, up until he’s a Senior and he's finally a Frosh. In this time he's been ignoring the ghost, as he figured out she (the ghost) doesn't realize he can see her. Zenick's rather emo and blunt about everything, the perfect pessimist, and when Corneilious tells him about his stalker he's little of help. Eventually he speaks to her, and Vox flips out. <3 She starts to be more scattered and he realizes Vox can't be his sister, so he begins to pester the spirit until he confronted that she's his Guardian angel (despite being as equally pessimistic as Zenick, and constantly trying to get into his pants).Using her powers in conjunction to Crow's connections (she's a drug dealer basically) he finally believes his sister is truly dead. Zenick ends up leaving Crows care once she gets busted (while helping Neili) and they end up split. Turmoil, blahhhh, dark thoughts, Vox decides to offer him a alternative to his life instead of death - become a angel like her and help others. He agrees seeing no more point in it, and thus becomes a GA (Now 21) and then during this time once he finally gets assigned a person, as to which the rules are the person you're most attracted to (not everyone gets one, either) he finds his vibe leading to his sister, who really was alive. To which he's forever separated from, left stalking her as her guardian angel. <3
THE END
=Copied and Pasted from a AIM convo, so. xD=
And additional things you may be asking I ended up addressing to other people:
Angels? Reasoning?
I don't believe in it, but the thought fascinates me. And well, younger!Neili is a church boy as his parents were/are, but he gives it up. So it's part of his "Oh god you're kidding me right?" and yeah pfft. Not Heaven and hell though - just beings much like 'luck'.
Crow? What up with her?
Crow (Lynn's her real name) is Zenick's sister... she's a total druggie with connections everywhere. Her nick name is Crow because in Highschool she had the ability to get her hands on anything and everything, was a awesome pickpocket and hoarder, a real supplier, which is like a crow that steals and hoards things.She's not religious in the least - only Neili's parents are.
Zenick/Crow relations to Neili:
Neili & his parents are apart of the local church group, and as apart of a 'community watch' thing, he's sent to check up on them as he's close in age to both of them.
HELP IS REALLY LOVED. <3
Can you guys help me out? It's okay to totally rip on it, I love the idea to peices for some reason, and you won't make me hate it in the least.
When Neili is 12, his 16 year old sister goes missing, and it's reported as a kidnapping. At this time, he suddenly finds himself 'stalked' before realizing his stalking isn't something human. Eventually he concludes it must be a ghost, and believes it's his sisters ghost haunting him as it only ever shows up when bad things are bound to happen. When he's 14 he meets Zenick and Crow (Lynn), who are 10 & 18 respectively as part of a church group thing in order to keep tabs as Lynn is Zenick's rather 'loopy' guardian of a Sister (his parents were rather sick of Crow so they got her her own apartment and sent Zenick to live with her to keep tabs). Zenick's blind, so he finds more and more time with him, up until he’s a Senior and he's finally a Frosh. In this time he's been ignoring the ghost, as he figured out she (the ghost) doesn't realize he can see her. Zenick's rather emo and blunt about everything, the perfect pessimist, and when Corneilious tells him about his stalker he's little of help. Eventually he speaks to her, and Vox flips out. <3 She starts to be more scattered and he realizes Vox can't be his sister, so he begins to pester the spirit until he confronted that she's his Guardian angel (despite being as equally pessimistic as Zenick, and constantly trying to get into his pants).Using her powers in conjunction to Crow's connections (she's a drug dealer basically) he finally believes his sister is truly dead. Zenick ends up leaving Crows care once she gets busted (while helping Neili) and they end up split. Turmoil, blahhhh, dark thoughts, Vox decides to offer him a alternative to his life instead of death - become a angel like her and help others. He agrees seeing no more point in it, and thus becomes a GA (Now 21) and then during this time once he finally gets assigned a person, as to which the rules are the person you're most attracted to (not everyone gets one, either) he finds his vibe leading to his sister, who really was alive. To which he's forever separated from, left stalking her as her guardian angel. <3
THE END
=Copied and Pasted from a AIM convo, so. xD=
And additional things you may be asking I ended up addressing to other people:
Angels? Reasoning?
I don't believe in it, but the thought fascinates me. And well, younger!Neili is a church boy as his parents were/are, but he gives it up. So it's part of his "Oh god you're kidding me right?" and yeah pfft. Not Heaven and hell though - just beings much like 'luck'.
Crow? What up with her?
Crow (Lynn's her real name) is Zenick's sister... she's a total druggie with connections everywhere. Her nick name is Crow because in Highschool she had the ability to get her hands on anything and everything, was a awesome pickpocket and hoarder, a real supplier, which is like a crow that steals and hoards things.She's not religious in the least - only Neili's parents are.
Zenick/Crow relations to Neili:
Neili & his parents are apart of the local church group, and as apart of a 'community watch' thing, he's sent to check up on them as he's close in age to both of them.
HELP IS REALLY LOVED. <3
